As the perpetually
angry Manthara entered the palace gates, she immediately took notice to the
lively, festive atmosphere. All around her, people were smiling, laughing, and
partaking of the king’s favorite wines. “Look at all of these ridiculous
people, what right have they to be so happy?” she grumbled to herself. When
Manthara arrived at Queen Kaikeyi’s room, she noticed three servant girls
wearing extravagant jewelry. “Thieves!” she declared as she struck the nearest
girl with her cane. “How dare you steal from guests in the king’s palace!” As
Manthara reared back to assault another servant, Kaikeyi rushed to intercept
the blow. “Subdue this rage!” Kaikeyi insisted. “These jewels have been given
as gifts in celebration of Rama’s coronation.” “This can’t be!” she thought to
herself, “How could that little demon that once shot toy arrows at my hindquarters
be elevated to a position of authority in this great kingdom? This will surely
bring an end to our people.” Manthara silently took a seat, with a look of
utter dismay painted on her face as she pondered solutions to this catastrophe.
“How can these fools
express so much joy when presented with such terrible news? If nobody else will
stop this madness, then I must take these matters into my own hands.
Unfortunately, it is too late to slay this monster. I am old and weak, while he
is a trained warrior protected by numerous guards. Oh, how I should have
responded when Rama first wronged me! I cannot simply approach King Dasaratha and
beg him to reconsider. His unwavering love for his son will surely cloud his judgment,
and I can’t waste time trying to convince an old man who cares more about his
son than the people of his kingdom. That’s it! I may not be able to persuade
Dasaratha, but my queen has been granted two wishes. If I could just convince
her of Rama’s evil ways, then he may be banished and the more respectful
Bharata can take his place on the throne.”
(Manthara Persuading Kaikeyi: LiveIndia)
Author's Note: Manthara's (or Kooni's) actions were one of the most sudden and underdeveloped parts of both versions of The Ramayana that we've read. I wrote this story to elaborate on Manthara's thoughts upon learning about Rama's upcoming coronation. I chose not to provide a more logical incentive for her actions because I think that she is a highly irrational character. I also tried to provide better dialogue between Kaikeyi and Manthara to expose how she might have instilled fear into Kaikeyi to motivate her to go along with such an absurd plan.
Bibliography: Buck, William (1976). Ramayana: King Rama's Way
Austin, I really enjoyed your story! I kept reading eager to find out what happened next! I liked how you elaborated on Manthara's thoughts! It really gave me a better understanding of the story in general! I like to do my stories similar to this as well. Great job and I look forward to reading more of your stories in the future.
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ReplyDeleteGood job with this retelling of Manthara (AKA Kooni's) treachery. I agree with you that the whole situation involving Kaikeyi and Manthara is one of the least developed events of the Ramayana, yet it's one of the most significant. Manthara seemingly has nothing to gain or lose from her interjection into the affairs of nobility. She prods Kaikeyi under the guise of concerned subordinate, but I've always wondered if her true motives were more sinister.
Hi Austin,
ReplyDeleteI thought that this story was really good! I definitely felt that this part of the story was underdeveloped, and I just love the way you developed it! It was interesting to see how you gave Manthara a motive and so much passion behind doing what she did! Although we obviously thought Rama was good for the kingdom, she really thought that he would bring the kingdom's downfall! Great job!
Hey, I thought your story was great. I know on your introduction you said you were much of a creative writer, but I still wish you had transformed this story more, you know? Theres just a lot of creative options with this class and I really hope you get to explore them! Otherwise, it was a great story and I wish I could have read more!
ReplyDeleteYour story was really interesting and I got to say you can write really well. It was a very smooth and flawless read, and it also got me hooked to read more. You did an excellent job giving a better story of how Manthara convinced Kaikeyi to follow her plans. I really wonder what your version of the plan and the follow through of it would be.
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